Prologue 1.1

I posted the first version of the prologue on two of the critique groups I belong to. So far I've received three critiques, and two of them slashed it to pieces. After reading the comments carefully and taking a good hard look at the prologue, I have to admit they're right - for the most part. Right now I'm trying to shorten the prologue, which it came out too long. And although the dialogues were good, it didn't serve its purpose. I've chopped out the dialogs between Apollo and Eros. From 1,360 words, I'm down to 956. I still want to keep who's the hero as a surprise, so I'm still debating about how to end the prologue without giving it away.